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Post by lightfire on Jun 17, 2008 11:37:53 GMT -4
the two alone in the style of E. E. Cummings
barely rising is the tide in the moonlight illuminating people( strolling)fairly bright and two alone,they stand slowly sinking in the sand: they are waiting for something--something in the night
and are they being watched by others who view( like disapproving mothers) while the two alone,they walk one a dove and one a hawk their silhouettes contrast--contrast to each other
crashing softly is the ocean surf while the mothers are in completely unknown turf as the two alone,they lark in the sea that’s cool and dark rolling helplessly--helplessly laughing with mirth
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Adalie Bates
Aspiring Author
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You shouldn't risk it all until you are sure of what you have to lose.
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Post by Adalie Bates on Jun 17, 2008 13:31:10 GMT -4
Beautiful. It sounds like a hopeless but unavoidable love of two people who are very different. Am I right?
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Post by lightfire on Jun 18, 2008 7:26:55 GMT -4
yeah. Well, at first, I was like, "What am I supposed to write?" because it was an assignment for this poetry collection we did in class (Honore/LMP did it too). I ended up writing something I really liked. I'll post the rest of the stuff I wrote later.
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Post by silverstripe on Jun 19, 2008 10:15:49 GMT -4
hmm .. it´s good!
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